Edwin, this prologue is incredibly immersive. I love how you’ve woven the futuristic corporate world, lunar exploration, and human fragility together. The way you show small towns like Amarillo caught in the machinery of ambition makes the story feel both vast and deeply personal. I’m already intrigued to see how Daniela and Iker navigate this fragile, impossible world.
What matters here is not what this prologue is about, but the optics it establishes from the first lines.
You begin not with characters, and not even with disaster, but with the language of progress — that calm, confident tone usually used to justify what is presented as inevitable.
The Moon stops being a myth and becomes a quarry.
Not evil, not villains, not apocalypse — but a contract with better lighting.
A future promised not out of greed, but out of calculation. And that is precisely why it feels so believable.
It’s crucial that Amarillo doesn’t appear as an exception, but as a consequence.
The city is not framed as a victim so much as a node — a place where decisions made elsewhere finally condense.
No demonization. Just economics, legislation, water rights, contracts, and silence purchased in advance.
The catastrophe doesn’t read as a surprise.
It reads as structural.
Like a technical failure inside a system that had already accepted human loss as an acceptable variable.
Against this backdrop, it matters that the “miracle” is not offered as comfort.
It arrives not as reward or meaning, but as a rupture in causality itself —
something that does not explain the disaster or redeem it, but instead makes the old ways of speaking about life and death insufficient.
For the reader, this is a strong entry point.
Because the text offers no moral distance:
we all live inside deals like these — we’re just not always standing on the blast line.
And if this is truly a story about the “strange and fragile ways we survive,”
the prologue does the most honest thing it can:
it shows that survival begins not after catastrophe,
but long before it — in the language of promises, in the acceptance of terms, in the willingness to believe that the future can be afforded on credit.
This is not an invitation to find out “what happens next.”
It is an invitation to enter the system itself,
where pretending to stand outside is no longer possible.
Like the concept and it has your voice to be sure. As a non paid subscriber I won't be getting access to all the behind the scenes mumbo jumbo which is a real shame, but I will use my imagination.....LOL!
Very good Edwin I enjoy the way you connect current issues then project these elements into the future tale. Writing a novel consists of so many facets of action and non action I look forward to seeing how the characters and story emerge onto the screen.
I was totally reading this like it was real until it hit, "by 2028..." Hehe that's what I get for neglecting the intro. So here for this story, Edwin! 🖤
Really cool.
Thanks, Leo!!!
Edwin, this prologue is incredibly immersive. I love how you’ve woven the futuristic corporate world, lunar exploration, and human fragility together. The way you show small towns like Amarillo caught in the machinery of ambition makes the story feel both vast and deeply personal. I’m already intrigued to see how Daniela and Iker navigate this fragile, impossible world.
I means a lot to read your commentary. Thanks so much!
I hope to keep you interested as the story unfolds.
Yes, I will do my best to keep in touch with this story.
What matters here is not what this prologue is about, but the optics it establishes from the first lines.
You begin not with characters, and not even with disaster, but with the language of progress — that calm, confident tone usually used to justify what is presented as inevitable.
The Moon stops being a myth and becomes a quarry.
Not evil, not villains, not apocalypse — but a contract with better lighting.
A future promised not out of greed, but out of calculation. And that is precisely why it feels so believable.
It’s crucial that Amarillo doesn’t appear as an exception, but as a consequence.
The city is not framed as a victim so much as a node — a place where decisions made elsewhere finally condense.
No demonization. Just economics, legislation, water rights, contracts, and silence purchased in advance.
The catastrophe doesn’t read as a surprise.
It reads as structural.
Like a technical failure inside a system that had already accepted human loss as an acceptable variable.
Against this backdrop, it matters that the “miracle” is not offered as comfort.
It arrives not as reward or meaning, but as a rupture in causality itself —
something that does not explain the disaster or redeem it, but instead makes the old ways of speaking about life and death insufficient.
For the reader, this is a strong entry point.
Because the text offers no moral distance:
we all live inside deals like these — we’re just not always standing on the blast line.
And if this is truly a story about the “strange and fragile ways we survive,”
the prologue does the most honest thing it can:
it shows that survival begins not after catastrophe,
but long before it — in the language of promises, in the acceptance of terms, in the willingness to believe that the future can be afforded on credit.
This is not an invitation to find out “what happens next.”
It is an invitation to enter the system itself,
where pretending to stand outside is no longer possible.
Brilliance
🙏🏽🫶🏽
Like the concept and it has your voice to be sure. As a non paid subscriber I won't be getting access to all the behind the scenes mumbo jumbo which is a real shame, but I will use my imagination.....LOL!
Lol
Hope you’ve liked what you've read so far
I would have went with a biological disaster. moon microbe comes to earth but yeah I like it so far. lol!
Just you wait 😂 😆
Very good Edwin I enjoy the way you connect current issues then project these elements into the future tale. Writing a novel consists of so many facets of action and non action I look forward to seeing how the characters and story emerge onto the screen.
Thank you, Kevin.
I look forward to sharing
Nice!!!
🙏🏽🫶🏽
So excited for more!
That put a smile on my face, Daniela ☺️
I was totally reading this like it was real until it hit, "by 2028..." Hehe that's what I get for neglecting the intro. So here for this story, Edwin! 🖤
That's awesome!
Your comment gave me an idea for a short vid 😁
It's on my profile . I hope you like.
It's great to know you can visualize this!
Thanks for the commentary!